Here I will use ASA UK as an example.
Moonlight Sonata
Screenplay by
Maximilian Gehlen
SCREEN BLACK
NON-DIEGETIC Piano music starts to play softly in background (Liebestraume, By FRANZ LISZT)
OPENING CREDITS ROLL FOR THE FIRST 15 SECONDS
FADE IN:
HAZEL’S ROOM - DAY - 13 YEARS AGO
SCENE IS SHOWN AS IF TAKEN FROM THE FOOTAGE OF A HANDHELD VIDEO RECORDING, TAKEN BY THE MOM.
HAZEL is playing the piano joyfully as his MOM gives positive remarks.
MOM
Keep going! You’re doing great!
HAZEL’S ROOM - DAY - 9 YEARS AGO
FADE TRANSITION:
HAZEL continues to play the piano, still with a smile on his face, now with 4 TROPHIES on his shelf and a picture of him with his mother, as HAZEL holds up his first trophy.
HAZEL’S ROOM - DAY - 6 YEARS AGO
FADE TRANSITION:
HAZEL continues to play the piano, it can be seen he's lost his bright smile. There are now 10 TROPHIES on his shelf, with the picture of him and his mom now showing them holding a trophy together.
HAZEL’S ROOM - DAY - PRESENT
HAZEL is still playing the piano. Dozens of trophies on his shelf, with the picture of him and his mom now showing only his mom holding the trophy. He is now on the verge of tears as his mother berates him for his lousy playing.
MOM
Do better! I know you can do better! Play faster or I'll get the ruler Hazel!
CUT TO POV SHOT OF HAZEL FROM THE POV OF A PIANO KEY.
HAZEL begins to tear up as his eyes turn red. However, he continues to play the piano.
MUSIC CLUB CLASSROOM - DAY
NON-DIEGETIC piano music stops. Replaced by HAZEL’S diegetic playing.
MATCH CUT IS USED TO SHOW HAZEL FROM THE SAME POV AS BEFORE, ONLY AT A DIFFERENT SETTING - HIS SCHOOLS MUSIC ROOM.
HAZEL is now playing on his school’s music clubs’ piano - continuing where the song left off in the previous scene. Tears are gone, only a sad expression is left on his face.
CUT TO MEDIUM CLOSE UP FROM THE SIDE
HAZEL continues to play as his clubs’ teacher tells him to stop - HAZEL is too focussed in to hear it.
(TEACHERS voice starts faded and gets clearer)
TEACHER
Hazel. Hazel [louder].
CUT TO OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT OF TEACHER.
(Voice is now fully clear)
TEACHER
Hazel [yelling]!
FAST CUT TO MEDIUM CLOSE UP OF HAZELS UPPER BODY FROM PREVIOUS POV SHOT - FROM THE POV OF THE PIANO KEYS.
HAZEL’S eyes focus in and he jumps in his seat out of shock. He looks around in a confused daze, and then looks to his teacher.
CUT TO OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT OF TEACHER FROM HAZELS POV.
TEACHER
Get back to your seat, Hazel.
CUT TO MEDIUM CLOSE UP FROM THE SIDE OF HAZEL STANDING UP
CUT TO MEDIUM CLOSE UP OF HAZEL SITTING DOWN AT HIS DESK.
HAZEL puts his bag on the ground, sits down, and lays his chin on his palm, as he stares off blankly into the distance.
CUT TO MEDIUM CLOSE UP OF TEACHER STANDING IN THE FRONT OF THE CLASS.
TEACHER begins to introduce the music club's newest member.
TEACHER
Good afternoon everyone! Today we have a new student joining us today in our music club!
TEACHER waves her hand in a “come in” motion towards HARMONY.
NON-DIEGETIC PIANO MUSIC FADES BACK IN QUIETLY. BUILDS UP THROUGHOUT THE SCENE.
CUT TO CLOSE UP OF DOOR SWINGING OPEN AND HARMONY’S FEET WALKING TOWARDS THE FRONT OF THE CLASS.
HARMONY enters the classroom.
CUT TO CLOSE UP OF HARMONY’S NECK AND MOUTH. FACE NOT SHOWN.
HARMONY is in the front of the class, about to introduce herself.
HARMONY
Hello everyone! My name is Harmony! It's a pleasure to meet you all! I'm 16 years old and I just moved here a couple days ago.
CUT TO CLOSE UP OF HAZEl.
HAZEL is in the same position as before. Not paying attention to HARMONY, still staring blankly with his hand covering his mouth. Appears to be in deep thought.
HARMONY CONTINUES TO SPEAK AS THIS SHOT OF HAZEL IS SHOWN.
HARMONY
Some things I like to do are... to read books, go out to parks, and uhm… [pause]
CUT BACK TO CLOSE UP OF HARMONY’S NECK AND MOUTH.
A slight smile is brought to HARMONY’S face as she says her next words.
HARMONY:
I love playing piano!
CUT TO EXTREME CLOSE UP OF HAZEL’S EYES
Piano music from earlier reaches its crescendo and is at its fastest pace.
HAZELS pupils swing widely towards HARMONY’S direction, in the front of the class.
CUT TO BLACK.
TEXT DISPLAYED: MOONLIGHT SONATA. ZOOMS IN SLOWLY FOR THE NEXT FEW SECONDS.
Throughout the process of production, we received a lot of comments and feedback from Mr Nick as well as from each other. In this blog spot, I will compile the comments we received. One was taken from Maxi’s blog while the others are written by me (Nay).
This will start from the first draft video play.
Note: I will refer to our editor as Timo and our young Hazel as Timothy.
Timo had finished the first draft of the film and from that, we as a team gave feedback along with our teacher Mr Nick. Some scenes needed a bit of pace-changing, including the credits scene, and some transitions. Timo also experimented with adding a filter in the first shot, which made it look like it was shot from an old film camera. We decided this looked unprofessional, and told him to change it. Some scenes like the teacher telling Hazel to stop playing the piano also needed to be edited as he was meant to be initially out of focus, and then move into focus, which Timo hadn't done yet. As well as when the teacher starts the class, the ambient noise of students talking in the background suddenly disappeared, which we told him to keep - but just slowly fade out as the teacher keeps talking. Some lines were also cut out, including Harmony's "I love going to parks, reading books..." line, which we all agreed should be included to better the overall flow of the opening. Hopefully, by the next draft, all these issues will be mitigated.
9th March (Second Draft) written by: NayI checked the following websites independently.
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Google “media communication university”
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Shopee Website
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Lazada Website
Registering to be a lazada seller (lazada seller) - clickable banner
These titles all convey a sense of passion, connoting romance, and also incorporate subtle hints that music will play a role in the film.
Moonlight Sonata was our final choice; we chose this as our title as moonlight is commonly connoted with subjects of love and romance. While a sonata often is a long song that tells a story. Furthermore, Moonlight Sonata is a well-known song that may attract audiences that have an interest in music/more specifically, classical music
In the actual shoot, we also experimented with the actual shots to reach a variety. We didn’t follow the screenplay as strictly to see if there were any more types of angles that could possibly not be in the screenplay, this includes: - Teacher yelling for Hazel while sitting down and standing up - Shots focusing solely on Hazel’s hands playing the piano After around possibly 70 takes, our first day of the shoot is over and all the actors did a great job and were really cooperative. Day 2On the second day of the shoot, our main goal is to tackle all the scenes with younger Hazels. Our day starts at 11, with us setting and revamping Maxi’s living room and changing the furniture set up to make sure it fits with what we want and need. We moved a lot of stuff, from the things on top of the piano, around the piano to the sofa. After we set everything up, we went on a little brief of what we are doing, hence we started from the youngest Hazel’s scenes to the second Hazel. We did a lot of shots and experiments and trials for all scenes, even those that we don’t plan nor write in the storyboard/screenplay. We made sure to get more than enough shots so that during the editing, Timo can try some stuff. After multiple takes and reshoots, our second day is over, and big applause for the kids who were our young Hazels and worked together seamlessly. Day 3On our last day of the shoot, we just had to finish the rest of the shoot which was just a few scenes with Danny (Hazel) and Ms Lala (mother). For this shoot, we experimented a lot with the costume of the mother. Some things we did were using baby powder on her hair to create fake white hair to indicate her age and layering her outfit to make it more structured and shaped. For Danny, we just did a simple, formal outfit with a white button-up and long pants with an image of it being a competition outfit. We had an issue during this shoot for the final parts, our camera stabilizer died and stopped working. So we had to improvise and worked with a lot of prayers so it lasted through the shoot. We also focused a lot on the match cut of our opening so Timothy was very detailed about the positioning of the actor so it lines up as perfectly as possible. |
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STAGE 1: INITIAL CONCEPT DEVELOPMENT
CONCEPT 1
LOVESICK
Genre: Romance/Drama
Audience: 16-40 y.o, both woman and men
Note: This initial concept has been inspired by openings such as Whiplash (2014) and The Dark Knight (2008), the Dark Knight specifically led us to making one of the most climatic sequences of the film be put at the very beginning, while Whiplash inspired the confrontational style meeting between the 2 main characters at the very start of the film.
Synopsis
Adam (Arjuna Nakao) is a shell of a man. After a devastating breakup with his girlfriend of 2 years Jess (Jasmine Riadi), it seems like Adam’s life has spiraled into a dark abyss. The hole in his heart creates an unending void, and as he tries to fill that void with a life of debauchery and excess, his life slowly begins to lose meaning. That is until a woman named Alex unexpectedly barges into his life.
Lovesick is a story of heartbreak, depression, pain, but most importantly; it is a story of how one’s struggles are not forever - it is a story of recovery.
OPENING CREDITS (2 MINUTES TOTAL) - SCREENPLAY
SCENE 1:
SETTING: Empty room in an office building
COSTUME(s): Semi formal - work attire
SCREENPLAY:
[words in bold are used to convey emphasis, hyphens(-) are used to show where the talent has been cut off]
Shot 1
Scene starts with a close up of Adam’s face and eyes; with sweat running down his face and a nervous expression taking over his being. It is clear he’s done something wrong
Shot 2
Scene cuts to a medium-close up shot from behind of Jess walking frantically down a hallway, while camera tracks her, from behind. Then cuts to a shot of her face, still walking, while the camera is still tracking, however more shakily (to convey the unsteady state of mind she is currently in). It's clear she's angry,
Shot 3
Scene cuts to a medium close up of Jess from behind as she slams open the door to Adam’s room, tracking her as she goes in. Then cuts to a shot of her from inside the room - as she continues to walk towards Adam’s desk, with the camera still tracking her. Then cuts to a still close up of Adam with his head looking towards the ground, leaning against the side of a wall. Cuts back to over the shoulder shot of Jess, as she yells at Adam.
JESS:
Who the HELL do you think you are? Firstly, you lie to me, secondly you cheat on me with SARAH WALKER OF ALL PEOPLE, and NOW you’re saying that YOU’RE the one breaking up with ME?
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Adam
ADAM:
Look, Jess, please, let me explain-
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Jess
JESS:
No I'm not gonna let you say anything-
[Adam, now screaming]
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Adam
ADAM:
NO YOU LISTEN HERE, IM FED UP WITH THIS RELATIONSHIP, YES I DID SLEEP WITH SARAH. YES I ADMIT IT. BUT IT'S NOT LIKE YOU'RE COMPLETELY INNOCENT IN THIS SITUATION TOO, ARE YOU?
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Jess
JESS:
Jesus Christ Adam that was MONTHS AGO HAVE WE NOT GONE OVER THIS AGAIN AND AGAIN? [rubs hand over her face in frustration] YOU ARE THE BIGGEST ASSHOLE I'VE EVER MET!
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Adam
ADAM:
SO I'M THE ASSHOLE NOW? WOW [scoffs sarcastically] I'M THE ASSHOLE? YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND WHAT I'VE BEEN THROUGH JESS YOU JUST DON'T. HOW MANY SLEEPLESS NIGHTS I'VE HAD, HOW MANY COUNTLESS TIMES I'VE TRIED TO UNDERSTAND YOU WITHOUT GETTING ANYTHING BACK?
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Jess
JESS:
God please Adam for ONCE in your life WHY CAN'T YOU JUST ADMIT THAT YOU WERE IN THE WRONG?
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Adam
[Adam, now tearing up]
ADAM:
BECAUSE I JUST WANT YOU TO UNDERSTAND ME. I WANT YOU TO SEE HOW I FUCKING FEEL DAMNIT-
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of Jess
JESS:
ALL THIS TIME THATS WHAT IVE BEEN TRYING TO DO BUT YOU ADAM, YOU ARE SUCH AN INSUFFERABLE [pauses], EVIL, [pauses again as tears start to run down her face], JOKE OF A MAN. THAT'S WHAT YOU ARE. I'M THROUGH WITH YOU. I AM THROUGH WITH YOU. NOT THE OTHER WAY AROUND. WE’RE DONE.
Cuts to a full shot where a majority of the office and both Jess and Adam can be seen, as Jess turns her back on Adam and storms out the door. Adam does not move - he is just looking at Jess, as she leaves, sorrowingly, as he wipes the stream of tears off his face.
Then cuts to a close up from a high angle of his face looking up, still while crying, as he yells out, to no one but himself.
ADAM:
FUCK.
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SCENE 2
SETTING: Bedroom/House - 1 week later in the morning
COSTUME:
Shot 1
Scene begins with a close up shot of Adams face as he sleeps. Shot then switches to close up of Adam's alarm ringing, and then switches to a medium close up of him from his bed, lifting his arm up and turning off the alarm. Camera then shows him waking up from bed, from a low angle, from the foot of his bed. He rubs his eyes as he slowly gets out and sits down on the edge of the bed. Shot then cuts to a close up of his face, as he puts his head in his hands.
Shot 2
Adam gets up and begins to walk out of his room. Camera tracks him & pans to reveal bottles of alcohol, cartons of cigarettes, clothes, and more lying around messily in his room. Adam then leaves and shuts the door behind the camera
Shot 3
Shot starts with a medium close up of Adam from the other side of the door. Camera then tracks him as he sluggishly walks to the kitchen and makes a cup of coffee, Adam then turns around and looks down. Shot switches to close up of Adam's face looking down from a low angle. Adam puts his hand on his forehead as he proceeds to mumble to himself.
ADAM:
(regretfully) God… what have I done…
Shot 4
Adam picks up his cup of coffee and starts to drink it as the camera starts to dolly towards him. He then looks down, dissatisfied. After this, a series of jump cuts are used to portray Adam showering, brushing his teeth, clothing himself, and getting ready to go to work.
The Opening
The goal of this opening scene is to introduce the audience to the character of Adam, and to illustrate the effects this initial breakup had on him. This will leave the audience with a conceptual idea in their minds as to the type of man Adam is, but will also try to build sympathy for his character. This opening acts as a precursor as to what's to come in the rest of the movie, as the opening explores the huge hit of sorrow that comes with heartbreak, while the rest of the film explores the ongoing struggles of forgetting someone you’ve loved for so long, even when equally as “great” opportunities may present themselves.
CONCEPT 2
MOONLIGHT SONATA
Genre: Drama/Romance
Note: This opening has been influenced by openings from movies like 500 Days of Summer (2009). Specifically, the movie's use of storytelling and hermeneutic code that pull the audience in as to what the main character will do, and what’s going to happen next. The handheld camera scene that portrays the main character when he was a child comes from the movie as well.
Synopsis
Hazel (___) has been captivated by the piano ever since he was 4 years old. What originally started as a burning passion however, slowly turned into a repetitive chore and nothing less than a burden. The blame lies on his mother (Hawila Eva), who took advantage of Hazel's natural talent and used him as a cash grab. Hazel’s life takes a turn for the better however when she meets Harmony (____), the girl that had just transferred to Hazel's school, who reignites Hazel's passion for the instrument.
Hazel is a bright kid, raised by a single mother, Hazel found interest in the piano ever since he was 4
His mom found out, was really happy
Eventually, she realized he was a prodigy
This made them want to take advantage, and push him to become the very best
This led to Hazel to form a hatred of playing the piano
However, right as he was about to quit, he meets a girl named
Opening
The aim of Moonlight Sonata's opening is to introduce the audience to our main character, Hazel. This is done by illustrating his love for the key plotpoint of the film, the piano. The main conflict can also be interpreted from the opening alone, which is, how he has lost all passion and joy in playing the instrument he once used to love. This hooks the audience in and allows them to speculate why this may have happened, and what he’s going to do in the future (hermeneutic code).
The opening features a clip from a hand recorded video that Dylan's mom took of him when he was just getting into piano at the age of 4. His joy-filled face is then juxtaposed by a match cut of him in the present day, of him playing the piano, but this time, with a dead and almost depressed facial expression.
OPENING CREDITS: (2 MINUTES TOTAL)
SCENE 1:
SETTING: Hazel’s home
COSTUME(s): Casual Clothes
SONG USED (plays throughout the entire scene): Liebesträume - Franz Liszt (00:00 - 1:04)
SCREENPLAY:
Shot 1
Movie starts off with a black screen as non diegetic piano music starts off slow and quiet, and builds up slowly.
Shot 2
Scene then cuts to footage of a 4 year old Hazel from a handheld camera recorded by his mother of him as a small kid playing piano. Non diegetic piano music continues to play in the background while his mom talks over his playing with positive, reinforcing messages.
Shot 3
Time skip - 3 years later, match cut and fade transition is used to show Hazel playing the piano, this time it can be seen that there are 4 trophies on his piano - symbolizing his rapid progress. A picture on the wall can be seen of Hazel holding up one of his trophies, with his mom next to him.
Shot 4
Time skip - 3 years later, match cut and fade transition is used to show Hazel playing the piano again, this time with a less joyful expression on his face, as we can now see that he has 4 more trophies on his piano, and the picture on the wall now displays both Hazel and his mother holding the trophy together.
Shot 5
Time skip - present day - mothers footage now shows Hazel playing the piano with dozens of trophies on his piano, and the picture on the wall now displaying only his mother holding the trophy, with Hazel merely standing behind her.
Shot 6
Cuts to POV close-up shot of Hazel from the point of view of one of the piano keys. Hazel is shown almost in tears and in great fright as his mother screams at him for making a mistake while playing a song.
MOTHER:
Do better! I know you can do better! Play faster or I'll get the ruler Hazel!
-------------------------------------------------END OF SCENE 1-------------------------------------------------
SCENE 2:
SETTING: Hazel’s school’s music room
COSTUME(s): School uniform
SONG USED: Liebesträume - Franz Liszt (1:04 - 1:15) for shots 7 & 8 - (1:50 - 2:20) for shots 13 until 18.
Shot 7
A match cut is used to show Hazel’s face from the same POV shot as shot 6, this time in a different setting, at his school’s music room, on his school’s piano. Hazel’s expression is now just of sorrow, with no tears. He continues to play the piano, with an unfulfilled look on his face.
Shot 8
Cuts to a medium close-up of Hazel playing from the side of the piano, he is fully focused on playing as when the teacher begins to call his name, he isn’t hearing it.
TEACHER:
Hazel… Hazel [louder].
Shot 9
Cuts to over the shoulder shot of the teacher
TEACHER:
Hazel [yelling]!
Shot 10
Cut to the same POV shot of Hazel from the POV of the piano keys, this time a medium close-up of his chest and face. Hazel’s eyes then widen and he jumps in his seat out of shock.
Shot 11
Cuts to an over-the-shoulder shot of the teacher as she tells Hazel to get back to his seat.
TEACHER:
Get back to your seat, Hazel.
Shot 12
Cut to a medium close-up shot of Hazel sitting down at his desk, as he puts his chin on his hand and looks sadly into the distance.
Shot 13
Cuts to a medium close-up of the teacher at the front of the classroom, beginning the music club meeting, talking about the club's new member.
TEACHER:
Good afternoon everyone! Today we have a new student joining us today in our music club!
[teacher waves her hand in a “come in” motion towards harmony]
Shot 14
Piano music begins to fade back in quietly and builds up throughout the rest of the scene. Cuts to a close-up dolly shot of Harmony’s shoes, as she walks inside the classroom, and stops as she reaches the front of the class.
Shot 15
Cuts to a close-up shot of Harmony’s neck, up until her mouth, as she begins to introduce herself.
HARMONY::
Hello everyone! My name is Harmony, and it's a pleasure to meet you all! Some things I like to do are reading, going out to parks, and uhm… [pause]
Shot 16
Cuts back to a close-up shot of Hazel in the same position as before, still staring into the distance, not paying attention to Harmony.
Shot 17
Cuts back to the same shot of harmony as in shot 15, and continues after her pause, with a slight smile now visible as she says her next few words.
HARMONY::
I love playing piano!
Shot 18
Piano music from the beginning reaches a high and crescendos. Cuts to an extreme close-up shot of Hazel's eyes as his pupils swing widely towards Harmony, in the front of the class.
Shot 19
Cuts to a black screen. Text displayed: MOONLIGHT SONATA
CONCEPT 3
MR. FAHRENHEIT
Note: This opening has been inspired by openings of movies such as Baby Driver (2017), with its fast-paced editing, swift cinematography, and heavy use of narrative codes.
Synopsis
Dylan Fahernheit’s high school life started out as any other teen’s. After his parents divorced though, everything took a turn for the worse. Dylan now enjoys a life of drug abuse and addiction, as he seems to have lost every single friend he’s ever known. However, while contemplating suicide, an unfamiliar face asks him the question he's been yearning for someone to ask him all his life, “How are you?”.
Dylan used to be someone who loved life
Now he has fallen into a deep drug addiction that has ruined his life
He doesn't care about life or anything at all for that matter
But suddenly, a girl comes into his life, he makes him think that it might be worth living after all
Opening
Mr. Fahrenheit’s opening is a fast-paced opening featuring rapid cuts between shots of Dylan driving his car down the highway at super high speeds, while he's singing his lungs out to the Queen song he's blasting on the speakers. This opening tries to convey Dylan's overall carelessness for life, with subtle hints of his drug addiction being portrayed as well, with pills and syringes lying around the back of his car. He lives his life like he's prepared to die, and that's what we want the audience to feel. Hermeneutic code is applied and hooks the audience in by making them wonder who this character even is, as his name is not revealed, why he's driving down the highway super fast with music blasting, and what led him to this drug addiction. This pushes viewers to continue watching on.
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